Thursday, November 5, 2009

Marissa's Mess critique

This is a general summary of the critique shared yesterday in class
  • Use Maurice's character more
  • Work the conversation between Erskine and Patricia
  • Work conversation between Trent, Jake and Marissa in the car
  • There is a consensus that too much dialogue is used in the later part of t he script. It should be action driven not dialogue driven.
  • Why did David choose that time in particular to as her out...?
  • Change Jake dying....this changes the entire tone of the ending.

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