Marissa's Mess critique

This is a general summary of the critique shared yesterday in class

• Use Maurice's character more
• Work the conversation between Erskine and Patricia
• Work conversation between Trent, Jake and Marissa in the car
• There is a consensus that too much dialogue is used in the later part of t he script. It should be action driven not dialogue driven.
• Why did David choose that time in particular to as her out...?
• Change Jake dying....this changes the entire tone of the ending.