- Use Maurice's character more
- Work the conversation between Erskine and Patricia
- Work conversation between Trent, Jake and Marissa in the car
- There is a consensus that too much dialogue is used in the later part of t he script. It should be action driven not dialogue driven.
- Why did David choose that time in particular to as her out...?
- Change Jake dying....this changes the entire tone of the ending.
Thursday, November 5, 2009
Marissa's Mess critique
This is a general summary of the critique shared yesterday in class
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